IELTS Writing Task 2 – Assistance for Poor Nations’ Citizens – Band 9

IELTS Task 2 Writing

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education, or is it the responsibility of the government of poorer nations to look after their citizens?

Write at least 250 words.

Is it to be expected that richer countries allocate some of their revenue to countries with low GDP and give aid such as food and pedagogy, or is it the responsibility of local authorities to provide for their own population in poor nations? 

What subject am I to discuss in my essay? = Topic? = Assistance for poor nations’ citizens

What specifically about this subject am I to discuss? = Controlling Idea? =

Is it the sole responsibility of poor countries’ governments, or is it also the responsibility of wealthier nations? 

***The second option does not state that it is just the responsibility of a wealthy country, but rather, that it is a shared responsibility. 

NOTE: the two main reasons that many high-level English IELTS candidates score poorly on the Writing Section is because:

  1. They do not clearly and specifically address the question
  2. They do not write an expository and persuasive essay according to a college-level standard.     

NOTE: some bad ideas about the introduction of a Band 9 essay, is that it has to be short - *There is no such rule in writing that an introductory paragraph must be short. 

*Simply paraphrasing the Task 2 question is NOT a good strategy for high band scores – just paraphrasing the questions is middle school level essay writing. 

What does it mean to provide aid to the citizens poorer nations?

A: Improving the quality of live for impoverished citizens in poor countries by providing basic needs such as nutrition and literacy for both survival and development.

Why is it necessary to aid citizens of poor nations?

A: It is humanitarian as well as beneficial for all people to aid impoverished citizens. “The Utopic Society” 

How can poor citizens be aided?

A: Provide food for strength, and education and training so that they can gain employment.

(Think about universal wisdoms when you contemplate ideas for IELTS writing. Ex. Teach a person to fish, not just give them a fish.)

Why should wealthy nations also share in this responsibility?

(***Think positives! AND ***Think)

This leads to faster and more efficient progress.

Why should local governments be also responsible? 

To create an independent and strong society. 

THESIS: It is both the responsibility of wealthier nations as well as local governments of poorer countries to aid their citizens, the former is needed for faster progress and the latter for strong independence.

Introductory Paragraph (H.W.)

(Hook) Having the opportunity for a high quality of living is the right of all people. (Background) This means improving the living standards for impoverished citizens in poor countries by providing basic needs, such as nutrition and literacy, for both survival and development. It is not only humanitarian but also beneficial for all people to aid impoverished populations. (Thesis) As such, it is both the responsibility of wealthier nations as well as local governments of poorer countries to aid their citizens, the former is needed for faster progress and the latter for strong independence. 

BODY 1 – topic sentence = deeper definition of faster progress by aid from abroad. 

The resources of wealthier countries assist poorer nations to advance their development much faster than if they were left to deal with their challenges on their own, leading to noticeable change in a matter of decades rather than centuries. (Explanation) When rich nations share not only their finances, but also their knowledge and workforce with countries lacking in these domains, they can establish infrastructure and education which in turn increases the rate of improving the local economy and employment. Of course, any food provided from abroad aids the local people to have health and energy while they learn and build. (Example) In light of this, in 2016, the Indian government exported around one million tonnes of wheat to South African regions which had been stricken with drought in order to aid the local governments and people, and stimulate their economies. In this way, these communities recovered much faster from the disaster. 

In the long-term, it is also the task of local governments to create the functional systems necessary to feed and educate their poorer citizens so that they can become self-reliant and influential in the global community. (Explanation) Since most countries have unique cultures and identities, which are best understood by local authorities, it is the elected governments that are tasked with the responsibility to establish cities, industries and create a long and rich cultural history which the country can be proud of. This type of internal development can be observed in many of the former Soviet states which have now become modern economic powerhouses, such as the country of Kazakhstan that has evolved immensely to become a global business hub over the past five decades. 

CONCLUSION

In conclusion, for the overall success of poor citizens in nations that have low investment capital, it must be the responsibility of both the local authorities and wealthier nations to achieve optimal results. With the combined efforts of local and foreign aid, people can both suffer less and develop more. Ultimately, the goal is to build a utopic global community as fast as possible.      

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