IELTS Task 2 Writing – Children Development – Band 9

IELTS Task 2 Writing

You should spend 40 minutes on this task.

Some people believe that allowing children to make decisions on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Write at least 150 words.

*Be really careful with covert (hidden) topics. These are a bit trickier than overt (obvious) topics.

Certain individuals ascertain that permitting youth make choices on daily subjects (like food, attire, and activities) is probably going to create a culture of people that are driven by self-gratification only. Opposite to this belief, some suggest that it is necessary for kids to make their own choices about issues which impact them, discuss both and give your own thoughts.  

***Keep in mind that IELTS presents candidates with questions which are common situations to most people around the world regardless of culture, religion, gender and ethnicity. 

***This is important, because this means that most candidates should have a wealth of information about the answer as long as they take some time to think about it critically and visualize. 

TOPIC = (What is this essay aimed to discuss? Why is this essay aimed to discuss whether or not children should be allowed to make decisions on their daily matters? ***Often, when you identify the importance of the question, you identify the topic. “What is the end goal?”)

Children’s Development

Controlling Idea: what controlling or not controlling children’s decisions leads to in their and society’s development. ***And, YOUR opinion

Why do some parents control their kids’ everyday decisions?

To make better decisions based on their grater experience. (Eating fruits instead of chocolate for breakfast)

Discipline – self-control in the decision-making process. 

Why can this be bad?

Children may lack-confidence and build too much dependency on others.

When you have a situation where both sides have positives and negatives, before you decide on your answer (which side you support), ***put yourself into the situation – ask yourself, “What would I do, if I were the parent of two kids growing up?”

“Guided decisions”.

(How many body paragraphs and what is included?)

Option 1 – 2 paragraphs: First paragraph includes both sides, and second paragraph my opinion.

Option 2 – 3 paragraphs: first is restricting choice, seconds is freedom of choice, and third is my opinion. *Make sure to write concise paragraphs so you do not run out of time and space. 

THESIS: Certain individuals restrict their children’s decisions because they want to make sure that their kids always go down the right path; others, however, give freedom of choice to their kids so that they develop independence. I believe that a balance of both, whereby parents guide their children’s decisions, is best for children’s development.

INTRODUCTION 

The goal of good parenting is empowering children to develop well. All humans are required to make millions of decisions throughout their lives, and their capacity to do this has a direct effect on their happiness and success. Certain individuals restrict their children’s decisions because they want to make sure that their kids always go down the right path; others, however, give freedom of choice to their kids so that they develop independence. I believe that a balance of both, whereby parents guide their children’s decisions, is best for children’s development.   

BODY 1 (restricting choice for best decisions 🡪 topic sentence with greater definition.)

Certain parents control their children’s daily decisions on diet, clothing, exercise and learning because they believe that they know better what has beneficial results, and they desire to minimize harm and maximize benefit for their offspring. I noticed that my friend, Andrew, never allows his four-year-old son, Alex, to eat what he desires, instead he is always feeding him with fruits, vegetables and fish; otherwise, Alex would eat chocolate for breakfast, lunch and dinner. Nevertheless, this leads children, like Alex, to lack confidence when needing to make choices.

BODY 2 (Freedom of choice for independence)

In light of this notion, many parents encourage their children to make choices for themselves, and to learn from their own mistakes, by allowing them to eat, wear and watch whatever they want. My friend Susan, lets her eight-year-old son, Tim, watch violent superhero cartoons, because she feels that he enjoys this more than watching educational shows, and that he can learn right from wrong in other ways, and develop a sense of independence quickly. However, at times this can be risky as highly independent children may encounter much conflict during their upbringing in society.

BODY 3 – (my opinion, a balance of both – guided decisions).

Therefore, I believe that the optimal approach for children’s decision-making process is to give kids the ability to choose withing certain parameters and with feedback. In this way, children are not only kept safe and happy, but also encouraged to develop critical thinking and self-reliance which is of great benefit for them and society. In fact, with my four-years-old daughter Sybella, I always discuss options for food and entertainment whereby she gets to choose from a healthy selection. As a result, I feel that she is confident in making her own choices while developing nicely, both mentally and physically. 

CONCLUSION

In conclusion, there are logical reasons for both parenting styles, those parents that give great freedom to their kids and those that do not. However, an extreme in each case, does carry with it negative repercussions. So, it is my belief that a balanced approach provides optimal nurturing of offspring which in turn leads to a confident future society.  

3 Responses to “IELTS Task 2 Writing – Children Development – Band 9”

  1. viraj Gosai

    I think this topic is more about what cause if children make an individual decision. is it a positive or negative effect ?? rather than parents guidance?

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