IELTS Task 2 Writing
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Write at least 250 words. (most band 7 – 9 essays are closer to 300 words)
Currently, the number of people in certain nations is composed of a higher proportion of younger adults in comparison to the elderly. Do the benefits of this context supersede the negatives?
***Your ultimate goal is to define and answer the question! STEP 1 – Plan your essay! (Most candidates that write a Task 2 response without planning do not perform well *even with good English)
a. First paraphrase the question – write it in your own words to better understand it and to think about it, and gather useful vocabulary.
b. Identify the TOPIC = the age distribution of countries.
(*It is extremely important to accurately identify a topic before verbal or written discussion – make sure to practice this!)
c. Is it better or worse to have a high ration of young to old adults?
d. Apply critical thinking to the topic and controlling idea – ask, ‘what’ why and how about each? What is the age distribution of a country?
A: the number of children, teenagers, adults, elder within a country?
Why does a certain age distribution develop in a country?
Economic boost leads to more births, medical improvements lead to longer lives less disease, war – strife – famine changes proportions.
How do different proportions of age demographics effect society?
Positively or negatively affecting food, economy, pension, competition.
Why do certain demographics have either a positive or negative effect?
Because certain age group are producers while other age groups are consumers.
***This is the point I need to reach in my planning for task 2, so I can write a fluent, coherent, high band task 2 essay – I deconstruct the question of Task 2 into the basic fundamental ideas.
TIP – The best thinkers and authors tend to be those who are not necessary masters at generating good answers, but rather, they are masters at generating good questions – keep this in mind for success on IELTS (and in life). Thesis: (T) Advantage or disadvantage because point 1 and point 2 –
The advantages of having a large proportion of young adults, aged 20 to 45, in a country supersedes the negatives as this leads to productivity and development.
INTRODUCTION (hook, background, thesis) (h)
The age demographic of a country has a direct effect on its prosperity. (background – definitions and importance – what are you writing about and why) Most countries categorize their age populations as children, teenagers, young adults (18 – 40),mature adults and elderly (60 and over). Different age groups have different capacities to ensure the growth and prosperity of their nation. (Thesis) The advantages of having a large proportion of young adults in a country supersedes the negatives as this leads to productivity and development.
BODY 1 (topic sentence + explanation + example + connecting sentence)- (productivity – clearly defined = topic sentence)
A large percentage of young adults in a nation empower society to significantly increase manufacturing and services; thereby, creating a strong economy. (Explanation – Why with quantification) The reason for this, is that 20 to 30-year-olds have lots of energy, they are able to work for 12 hours a day, as well as have many years of employment ahead. (Example – real world and may be used for both points). For example, a 25-year-old nurse can work double shifts in a hospital as where this becomes much more difficult for a 60-year-old nurse close to retirement. This is one of two clear benefits of having a large young adult population.
BODY 2 – (topic development = defined)
Young adults have great ambition to learn, create and invent socially and technologically, and these are the forces of progress for a nation. (Explanation) Young adults are driven by self-actualization, and adapt the latest information from universities and learn from the achievements and failures of the previous generation to build a better future. (Example) For instance, the nurse freshly graduated from university is up-to-date with the latest information on treatments and medication as where this is unlikely the case for nurses who are nearing their golden years. Furthermore, the young nurse is likely motivated to improve these modern treatments and invent or discover even better ones for the sake of their patients.
CONCLUSION (point restated/paraphrased + argument strengthened + take-home-message)
In conclusion, countries that have a large number of young adults tend to have greater growth and productivity. Therefore, having such an age demographic is greatly advantageous. This is likely the reason that nations with strong economies constantly strive to have a high-proportion of young adults in their societies.